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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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People
 have always had the desire to
copy
 their
behavior
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, their appearance, and
also
 their lifestyle from others. Due to the rapid pace of globalization and the huge amount of information flowing on the Internet,
society
 has more access to new trends in various areas
such
 as dressing styles and new
products
 in each section. Regardless of being the producer or the consumer,
people
 tend to
copy
 others’
products
 or styles. I believe that it is due to the nature of human beings and to a certain
point
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 it is necessary in
society
although
 in some cases it might not be acceptable in communities. In the following
paragraphs
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further
 consideration will be provided around the mentioned subject.
Firstly
, by the review of the fashion style in recent
decades
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 we comprehend that
copy
 is a vital element of
this
 industry. In
fact
, the more
people
copy
 others’ dressing
style
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styles
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, the more a particular set of
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dress
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 gets prevalent over a period of time.
This
, actually leads clothes companies to sell more.
For instance
, every year, clothing companies create a new winter style for their
products
 based on the
fact
 that
people
 usually
copy
 new styles.
Therefore
 they can gain a high amount of profit from the winter sale.
Secondly
, It is widely (believed) that the
products
 which are used by the majority of
a
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society
 have better quality.
In other words
,
people
 usually
copy
 others’ decisions in choosing
products
 because they think they wouldn’t be selected by others if they didn’t have standard qualifications. The point is that
,
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this
fact
 might not be always true. As an example, a product might have a high rate of sale despite the
fact
 that it doesn’t have a high quality. In
fact
, a particular good might be high
demanded
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 just because of strong advertisements that lead
people
 to
copy
 others and buy a specific product. In conclusion, the tendency to
copy
 has been prevalent among members of a
society
 since the early days of
the
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human creation.
Although
 it is a necessary attribute in every
society
, it might have negative effects that lead
people
 to make
a
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 wrong decision in choosing needed
products
.
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  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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