Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In global, a large number of oldster are doing their job from
home
while some children starting to
study
from
home
due to
technology
has become a complacent item and acceptable.
Technology
is a crucial tool that all
of
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people
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the people
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in the world can utilize simply.
Also
, many things that
people
can get from it. Workers and students nowadays tend to consume the internet to learn or search
many
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for many
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things which are related
with
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to
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their subject easily. Even though they are still at
home
, they can obtain advantages. To show the evidence for
this
case, either teenagers or adults studying and working from
home
and
they
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utilize their computers to look for anything
that is
related to their course.
However
, the adverse of
technology
for both workers and
student
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students
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who
doing
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do
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their activities at
home
are
lack
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a lack
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of
socialize
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socialisation
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and more indolent to move or exercise. There are several
people
who
work
from
home
and devote their time almost whole the day in front of
screen
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the screen
a screen
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.
As a result
, they lose their society and lack
of
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interaction with their family and friend because they just spend
much
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a lot of
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time with their
work
by computer.
Moreover
, some children feel lazier to do another activity because they have
been
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found an effective way to
study
by computer.
For example
, a large of children
subsequently
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who subsequently
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know about the internet and
study
with
computer
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computers
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tend to be indolent to move or
doing
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do
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some exercise. To conclude, it is believed that
technology
has many
advantage
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advantages
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to
work
or
study
, especially for
student
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students
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and
worker
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workers
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who have
a
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jobs or activities that should do at
home
.
Technology
is a satisfactory
tools
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tool
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that
people
easier to use for their
work
.
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