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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that controlling
noise
 needs to be method effectively. While the opponents of
this
 idea can make much
noise
 if they like, I would argue that it would be better to reduce
sound
.
On the other hand
, there is a variety of reasons why some
people
 want to make
noise
 according to love. One reason is that many persons must use loud
noise
 to easily concentrate on working or studying.
For example
, Lazanov's research effect on
noise
. He illustrated that students listen to music, and they can learn several hundred words of a foreign language in one lesson more than the traditional learning method.
Furthermore
,
noise
 becomes a familiar
sound
 along with industrialization and modernization. Humans are capable of adapting to a wide range of
noise
 levels in the city. Because they live in the city, where the population dwell crowded and skyscrapers grow up, construction and maintenance often take place.
As a result
,
instead
 of fighting those loud noises, they suit their own follow them.
On the other hand
, I believe that there should be some measures to control
sound
 strictly.
Firstly
,
noise
 effect concentration when
people
 are learning or working. Research showed that if everyone makes more than one task, they become more troublesome.
Secondly
, that
sound
 had a harmful impact on
people
’s health.
For instance
, a technical run machine of the production department of the company. He has worked for 8 years with an average
noise
 range of 80 Db.
Although
,
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 he checks his medical condition periodically, he starts to appear with several hearing problems
such
 as ear fatigue finishing working and encountering difficulty hearing soft noises. In conclusion, it seems to me that
noise
 should be limited in order to have a better life,
although
 some
people
 make disturbed by
noise
 without any consideration for others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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