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Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem.

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 of recruitment of
English
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language
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teachers
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 and French
language
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teachers
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 in Ontario for 6 years from 2001 to 2007. According to the statistics,
English
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language
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teachers
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 have recruited 75 per
cent
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 in the
first
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 year in 2001, followed by French
ones
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 with a small difference of just 5 per
cent
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 in the same year. In 2002 the
percentage
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 of
English
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teachers
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 was 57 per
cent
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, compared to just under 5 per
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 for the French
ones
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. For the
next
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 year, the figures fell considerably for the
English
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teachers
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, but rose dramatically for the French
ones
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 and reached a peak at 69 per
cent
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. So, there was a significant difference in
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 at
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 time. Since 2003, the trends have not changed as much as being observed with a slight fluctuation in
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. French
language
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teachers
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 gained the highest point during the
last
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 2 years to 75 per
cent
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, but
English
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ones
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 dipped in 2007 bellow 30 per
cent
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. Overall, it can be seen that more
teachers
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 have been recruited for the French
language
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 during the entire period of time.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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