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Deforestation is a serious matter, as the forest throughout the world are coming to an end. What are the causes, solutions and effect of this problem.

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The line graph provides information about the
percentage
 of recruitment of
English
language
teachers
 and French
language
teachers
 in Ontario for 6 years from 2001 to 2007. According to the statistics,
English
language
teachers
 have recruited 75 per
cent
 in the
first
 year in 2001, followed by French
ones
 with a small difference of just 5 per
cent
 in the same year. In 2002 the
percentage
 of
English
teachers
 was 57 per
cent
, compared to just under 5 per
cent
 for the French
ones
. For the
next
 year, the figures fell considerably for the
English
teachers
, but rose dramatically for the French
ones
 and reached a peak at 69 per
cent
. So, there was a significant difference in
percentage
 at
this
 time. Since 2003, the trends have not changed as much as being observed with a slight fluctuation in
percentage
. French
language
teachers
 gained the highest point during the
last
 2 years to 75 per
cent
, but
English
ones
 dipped in 2007 bellow 30 per
cent
. Overall, it can be seen that more
teachers
 have been recruited for the French
language
 during the entire period of time.
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