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In the future all cars, and buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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Compared to
last
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 decades, we can see that technology has been developed so much and we achieved plenty of scientific miracles over only a half
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century. So, we could say that people will no longer need to know how to drive and
cars
 and trucks will drive themselves automatically in the near
feature
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 and people just need to sit in and follow the ride.
However
, every scenario has its own pros and cons regardless of how perfect it is
and
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, so I will describe them in
this
 essay and state my opinion.
First
 of all, there are many numbers of advantages ascribed to
this
 phenomenon and one of the chief
merit
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 is that people will have more free time thanks to
driverless
cars
.
For example
, they can rest or sleep while
automatic
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 driving system is directing their
cars
 or they can spend more time with their families when they are going
to
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 vacations.
Also
, AI
system
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 will be more accurate than humans who can have mistakes sometimes and those mistakes can cost their
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lives
life
lifes
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.
Consequently
, AI does not make mistakes and always behaves as they are programmed. By virtue of that, we could see a large number of accidents and collisions could be reduced when automatic driving
cars
 are introduced. Turning to the disadvantages of the development of
driverless
cars
, the huge impact that will be
surffered
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suffered
offered
 from
this
 development is drivers. Due to the prevalence of those
cars
, drivers will lose their jobs since new
cars
 and
trucked
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 that will
be emerged
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emerge
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 from markets are driveless.
As a result
,
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate of one country would
be surged
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surge
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 and that could affect
economy
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the economy
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 of that country.
Therefore
, governments should consider
this
 as a serious matter and should not permit those
vechicles
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vehicles
 as many as that can lead drivers to
jobless
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.
Moreover
, companies should test
driverless
 vehicles carefully before they import them into markets because malfunctions and errors which could be threats to customers can
be existed
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 in the vehicles. To
conculde
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conclude
, I pen down saying that there are more benefits that we can get from
driverless
cars
 and trucks compared to the drawbacks which can be tackled by simple solutions.
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