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Prison is the common way most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide the public a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Historically, prison is considered to be the best method to eradicate
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 is deeply rooted in the mentality that eradicating criminals will solve the problem of
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. There are strong grounds for
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 the problem is in the ways criminals are trying to meet their needs due to improper teaching and
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 it is agreed that better education is a better way of resolving the wrongdoing.
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, those who are in favour of better schooling are trying to resolve the systematic issues. There is little debate over the fact that the
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 is driven by necessity, individuals who have fewer options to meet their needs will turn to
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 as the easiest option.By educating people and providing access to degree courses at no cost , the government can easily eliminate crimes.
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 is evident in the developed countries, where the government has taken initiatives to provide free literacy to their people.
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, the solution mentioned above is difficult to implement but provides the most effective method and
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 prison is considered to be the simple method to curb misconduct. There are many justifications cited for
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 but deterring criminals to repeat the
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 is the prime motive behind the punishment. A criminal being put in prison does not reverse their past action but it does deter the same action being committed by other individuals in the future.
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, If there were no punishments or extremely lenient sentences, it is a near inevitability that individuals would commit crimes, for a range of motives, more frequently.
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 it is concluded that education addresses the root causes of atrocity yet punishment is still a more effective preventative countermeasure. A combination of both is naturally ideal.
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