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Band 7.5

You bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •say about the concert •say why you are unable to go •inform how your friend can receive the ticket

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Dear Jass, I hope you find
this
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 letter in radiant health and good spirits. It's been a
while
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 since we met. I'm writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I have a ticket for a music concert by our favourite singer, but I won't be able to attend
due to
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 an emergency. That's why, I want to give it to you. As you know, I didn't miss any music events because of my passion for music.
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 is a two-day concert
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 happening next month in the Sports Stadium.
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, there will be a bar, food trucks, and rides, which you can enjoy with your other friends. Unfortunately, I received an email from my office recently regarding a project, so I have to visit the head office to resolve that problem. I'll not be able to come back during the concert.
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, I would like to offer
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 pass to you. You can either pick it up from my house or I can send it to you through email. I look forward to hearing from you. Best regards Tajinder Singh

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Include more specific information about the concert, such as the exact date and time, to provide more clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a distinct idea to enhance clarity and flow.
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The letter maintains a friendly and appropriate tone throughout, which suits the purpose of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and enhance the letter's coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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