Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Gender
equality
has been a hot topic in society since it is a crucial issue and individuals have their own opinion. Some people think that we have not achieved the desired equality
between men
and women
, and they demand to make real progress to fully obtain it. Yet, others have an opinion that there is a movement to attain equality
between the two genders. I will discuss both views in the paragraphs below.
Many people argue that our communities do not fully support equal opportunity between men
and women
, such
as opportunity in workforces and government institutions. For example
, the wage gap has been an ongoing issue in some countries such
as South Korea and the United States. Women
employees earn less money than men
employees even though they have similar educational backgrounds and work experience. On the other hand
, women
's capabilities are underestimated by society especially when they hold an important role at the government level. This
might be because of a notion in the community that men
are more accountable in formal institutions.
However
, because one person does something wrong, does not mean that everybody is acting the same way. Some people argue that equality
has been obtained as in some major companies, a lot of women
have an important C-level positions
. Correct the article-noun agreement
an important C-level position
important C-level positions
For example
, the L'Oreal group has an ongoing commitment to support women
leaders in the company and many women
become vice presidents or directors. Also
, women
scientists are recognized in the science world which is identified as a masculine world.
In conclusion, progress has been made but this
has not been fully valued by the whole society. We need governments and corporates' support in order to get same-gender opportunities and equality
in each aspect of life. By taking the same salary regulation and giving an opportunity for women
to sit in important roles, we are heading to equal life chances for both genders.Submitted by hanizachri on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite