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Films can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movies? Use specific examples and details to support your response

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Almost, everyone likes to watch films and the choices of the films differ from person to person.
For example
, some people like to watch a comedy film, some like adventure or art or thriller and many more. While watching a cinema, it is obvious to get some information about the country, in which the
movie
 has been made. As far as I am concerned, when I watch a
movie
 I come to know many new
things
 about the region, which I will explain in
this
 essay. As an initial point, the
first
 thing which I used to notice while watching a
movie
 is the culture of that region. The costumes of the actors, their talking style, their behaviour, the type of food they are having, their living surroundings, all these
things
 tell a lot about the culture of the place. From these
things
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 I can know about the lifestyle and the ay of living of that region. Watching these
things
 on screen
also
 helps us to remember them easily. The
second
 thing, which I will notice in the movies is the music, songs, and dances. every country has their own style of music and
dance
. When it comes to dancing, I would like to say that
dance
 is my favourite activity, I
also
 run a
dance
 school in which I used to train kids for solo and group
dance
. So, movies help me a lot to learn a new style of dances with variations.
This
 activity gives me immense happiness, and satisfaction,
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 me fit and healthy. In conclusion, I believe that watching a
movie
 gives us an opportunity to know some
things
 about the country, in which they are made.
Also
, it helps in learning the culture and way of living of the people,
besides
 that various fun
activity
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activities
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such
 as;
dance
, singing, etc. can
also
 be learned with the help of movies.
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