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2.You have moved to a new place. Write a letter to a friend giving reason why you moved to that place. Describe that place. Invite your friend to visit you.

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Dear Smith, I am writing to you to inform you that I
traveled
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 to Canada
due to
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 the fact that of my work
situaton
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situation
. I got an offer from a company which is in Toronto, Canada and
therefore
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 I had to change my place, too. here in Toronto there are many
type
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 of people who has their nationality and we can easily communicate with them, they are friendly and kind. the weather in hear is almost cold but has
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 a nice and beautiful overview
in
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 the city. everybody
use
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uses
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
train
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trains
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 for
transporting
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task response
Ensure to fully address the task question by explaining more about your work situation and the reasons for the move. Include more details about the company and your new position.
coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the coherence and flow of your letter by organizing your ideas more clearly. Consider using transition words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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