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The table provides us with information about five major types of fast food consumed in
Melbourne
 for 3 periods of
time
, in the year 2005, nowadays and in the
future
time
 2025. According to the data, the hamburger has increased their consumption during
this
time
 and it seems to have the same success in the
future
. On the other ,hand noodles and fried rice are less eaten in
Melbourne
 by 6 people in 2005, in the present
time
 food like fried rice is consumed by 9 people and noodles compared to just under 1 person. In 2005 Salad was ordered by 35 consumers with a slight difference in present
time
 but with an increasing number supposed in the
future
 till 41. Fried Chicken is the
second
 food after Hamburger required by the population living in
Melbourne
 with 35 people in 2005, 37 consumers in now
time
 and expected till 45 persons in the
future
time
. Overall the table backgrounds that in
Melbourne
 the most popular foods is Hamburger and Fried Chicken and less popular are Noodles.
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