Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?
Local individuals follow popular people
to
whom they watch on Change preposition
apply
televisions
and Fix the agreement mistake
television
newspapers
. According to my Change preposition
in newspapers
perspective
it is a good development as well as bad .
To commence with , famous personalities Add a comma
,perspective
becomes
popular these days because of their fame and name in the passion of movies , songs and so on. Correct subject-verb agreement
become
Firstly
, in this
contemporary era
everything is changed globally due to the advanced technology Add a comma
,era
moreover
, youngsters copy the fashions according to the famous actors , actress
,Fix the agreement mistake
actresses
Correct word choice
and singer
singer
. Fix the agreement mistake
singers
Secondly
,some folks did not like to copy the things
from popular people Because they preferred themselves to live in a simple way as compared to follow
the other rules . Wrong verb form
following
For example
, nowadays childerns
use Correct your spelling
children
internet
for watching movies Add an article
the internet
for
their favourite actors or actress after watching these Change preposition
about
things
they put pressure on their parents to give clothes , mobile
phones what they are watching Correct word choice
and mobile
on
the movies . Change preposition
in
Furthermore
, this
is not good at all because many parents cannot afford those things
due to financial problem
.
To sum up , I concluded that Fix the agreement mistake
problems
show off
can be removed if big personalities cannot give advertisements Add a hyphen
show-off
in
televisions and many other social sites by doing these Change preposition
on
things
it
will become Correct pronoun usage
apply
adverse
impact on our generation. It should be stopped by everyone .Add an article
an adverse
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite