Ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

Local individuals follow popular people
to
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whom they watch on
televisions
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television
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and
newspapers
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. According to my
perspective
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it is a good development as well as bad . To commence with , famous personalities
becomes
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popular these days because of their fame and name in the passion of movies , songs and so on.
Firstly
, in
this
contemporary
era
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everything is changed globally due to the advanced technology
moreover
, youngsters copy the fashions according to the famous actors ,
actress
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actresses
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,
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and singer
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singer
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singers
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.
Secondly
,some folks did not like to copy the
things
from popular people Because they preferred themselves to live in a simple way as compared to
follow
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the other rules .
For example
, nowadays
childerns
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children
use
internet
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the internet
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for watching movies
for
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about
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their favourite actors or actress after watching these
things
they put pressure on their parents to give clothes ,
mobile
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and mobile
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phones what they are watching
on
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the movies .
Furthermore
,
this
is not good at all because many parents cannot afford those
things
due to financial
problem
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. To sum up , I concluded that
show off
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can be removed if big personalities cannot give advertisements
in
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televisions and many other social sites by doing these
things
it
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will become
adverse
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an adverse
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impact on our generation. It should be stopped by everyone .
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