Some people believe that giving longer prison sentences is the best way ton reduce crime. Others believe that there are better ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Although
it is sometimes thought that
higher
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penalty is an effective means of decreasing felony, other people believe that there are more improved methods to curb scandals. In my opinion, I consider that
lengthy
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years
of imprisonment
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more appropriate. On the one hand, some people think longer prison is better as
criminals
are keep
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off
streets
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and
this
prevents them and others from re-offending so often, and I agree.
In other words
, if
criminals
who commit a violent
offense
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are in detention for several
years
, they are given
longer
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time to think about their
life
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and become
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better
person
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people
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.
Also
, extending
years
in jail serve as a deterrent to other who might want to commit similar atrocities.
For example
, in Nigeria, the number of rapists
have
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seen
significant
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reduction ever since
criminals
of
such
acts are being sentenced to life imprisonment.
Thus
,
this
has helped to eliminate the number of
occurrence
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of
crime
.
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, continuing penalty means that
society
is effectively protected.
That is
to say, when
criminals
who are a threat to
the
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society
are convicted
to
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longer
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years
in jail it would return peace and harmony back to the
society
.
Therefore
, reducing the incidence of
reported
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a reported
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heinous
crime
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crimes
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.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better if the focus is to build a greater
society
rather than
the
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punishment.
This
is because the cost to keep a prisoner for
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extended year can cost a fortune and the responsibility is often posed
on
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tax-paying
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tax paying
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citizens. So,
justice
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system should divert
their
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attention to ways in which
criminals
serve
the
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society
instead
of the way
round
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around
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.
For example
, in Japan, if one person steals property, he would stay
30days
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30 days
in an orphanage with foreign children that lost everything,
thus
,
this
policy reduced the
crime
rate. Another reason is that prison focuses on retribution but not on training and rehabilitation
programme
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programmes
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. Other better methods should be
devise
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in which villains are taught,
equipped
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and equipped
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with skills, knowledge and resources to become a better
person
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people
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.
Thus
, making the
society
free of
crime
. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions. I think that locking up lawbreakers for
years
are
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more advantageous as it discourages more
crime
and
return
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serenity and tranquillity to the community
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