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If you won the lottery, what would you do with the money? Would you change your lifestyle, choose to live the same way as you always have or a mix of both? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Winning a
lottery
, which happens rarely, is exciting. With
this
 huge
amount
 of
money
,
one
 can fulfil its dreams in the
way
one
 wants. If I get a chance to win a
lottery
, I will use that
money
 for both the options, some
amount
in
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 changing my lifestyle, and will save some
amount
 for a future prospectus. I think in
this
way
 for two reasons, which I will explore in
this
 essay. As an initial point, I would like to say that I have always desired to see different beautiful
places
 around the world,
such
 as Paris, Switzerland, Roam, New York, and many more. The
money
, which I will receive from the
lottery
, will be used partially travelling to these
places
. Roaming around
such
places
 will give me; immense happiness and satisfaction for knowing new
places
; the opportunity to explore new things; a chance to interact with new people; the possibility to know different cultures; and the probability of fulfilling my wish to see these
places
.
On the other hand
,
rest
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amount
 of the
money
, I would like to save for future prospectus, which later may be utilized in my higher studies. Being fond of studies, I
also
 aspire to go to grad school and wish to have a Master's degree for a better career and job opportunity. With
this
 fund, I can
also
 go to grad school.
For instance
,
one
 of my friends got admission to a University after completing
one
 year in a job
,
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 and used his job saving for that. I can save my time by saving funds and can instantly get admission
in
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 the school.
This
way
, I can utilise the won
lottery
 cash for my career
also
. In a nutshell, I believe that utilising the won cash from the
lottery
 in travelling to beautiful
places
 and in my education is the best
way
 I can make use of it.
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