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Recently abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It has long been my belief that
abortion
 is one the cruel criminal society can do. Many couples dream of becoming parents while others just throw it up. Throwing the baby when it comes as an embryo is a serious problem for both the mother and baby it is self.
Besides
, many people has knew that
abortion
 is vialote again laws. Take a look at teenagers who had sex without protection, many of them often used pills
instead
 of killing their babies. On the one hand, I strongly agree that
abortion
 should be legalized, in order to reduce the human population in
this
 world, the government make abortions became legal.
For example
, in Japan, many of the population are elderly people. Scientist believed that 60 per cent of the population are occupied by the old community. The main reason why
this
 issue happened is that youngers are not able to make the children, and when it happens, they go to the hospital to abort the kids.
In addition
, they believed that raising the children
,
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 needs extra time and extra patience to raise them in a good way.
However
, the disadvantage of
this
 issue is that the women could get an infection, and bleeding problems won't stop especially when it comes to incomplete
abortion
. In ,additions there is a bowel and possible ectopic and hard to get pregnant in the future. Yet,
this
 case is against some of the cultural and religions believed. To conclude, I am convinced that
abortion
 can be necessary when it has come to the emergency issues,
such
 as sickness, that can make the mother threaten the baby, with bold notes it should be operated by a professional one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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