Recently abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It has long been my belief that

abortion

is one the cruel criminal society can do. Many couples dream of becoming parents while others just throw it up. Throwing the baby when it comes as an embryo is a serious problem for both the mother and baby it is self.

Besides

, many people has knew that

abortion

is vialote again laws. Take a look at teenagers who had sex without protection, many of them often used pills

instead

of killing their babies. On the one hand, I strongly agree that

abortion

should be legalized, in order to reduce the human population in

this

world, the government make abortions became legal.

For example

, in Japan, many of the population are elderly people. Scientist believed that 60 per cent of the population are occupied by the old community. The main reason why

this

issue happened is that youngers are not able to make the children, and when it happens, they go to the hospital to abort the kids.

In addition

, they believed that raising the children

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needs extra time and extra patience to raise them in a good way.

However

, the disadvantage of

this

issue is that the women could get an infection, and bleeding problems won't stop especially when it comes to incomplete

abortion

. In ,additions there is a bowel and possible ectopic and hard to get pregnant in the future. Yet,

this

case is against some of the cultural and religions believed. To conclude, I am convinced that

abortion

can be necessary when it has come to the emergency issues,

such

as sickness, that can make the mother threaten the baby, with bold notes it should be operated by a professional one.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

282 words

7.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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