You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel, in their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say what the participants liked about the hotel explain why they were unhappy about the food suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to let you know the feedbacks about our meeting which held in your hotel recently. I should tell you the decoration was perfectly tailored to the aim of our meeting, and
also
the politeness of your professional staff makes our event memorable. I should also
mention the perfect signage in your hotel which helps to find meeting room
directly.
Let me explain the reasons Fix the agreement mistake
rooms
of
disappointment with the lunch bar. Some foods, salad Change preposition
for
in particular
, were prepared with low quality
ingredients. Add a hyphen
low-quality
Moreover
, vegetables were spoiled and were not edible. Additionally
, the beverages were warm and there was no ice to cool the
down.
It would be great if you could buy your goods with more attention and Correct your spelling
them
also
provide ice with drinks. Needless to say, these small problems are able to have negative
impact on your clients.
Please feel free to contact me if you require Add an article
a negative
further
information.
Yours faithfully
AliSubmitted by ali on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure, but you could improve it by using a wider range of cohesive devices and transition words.
Task Achievement
Make sure to develop each point fully. For instance, when mentioning low-quality ingredients, provide examples of what could be improved.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite