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In some countries,owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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From the past to the present, the importance of accommodation has increased. It is argued that some
people
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 prefer owning a
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, while other
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 think the opposite. As for my point of view, Both sides have reasonable reasons. To commence with, why
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 choose to own a
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 is a long-term investment.
People
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 are eager to invest in owning a
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 because they think of huge profits. If they buy any
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, more beneficial for their own future life.
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, they provide themselves with wealth and power chances.
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, if that person prefers owning
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 and that
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 are located in profitable and popular areas, he/she may make a lot of profit after selling them.
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,
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 care about the demand for
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 renting because no one buys a
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 and they are eager to sell their own
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. Some owners or renters demand their own houses.
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, Owning a
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 is more comfortable than renting in terms of utilization
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.
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 buy a
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 because they can decorate their own
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 whichever they want. They do not dependent on anything or anyone for using and decorating.
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, even if there are many reasonable reasons, all
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 do not have the same equal conditions with regard to economic levels.
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, Some
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 rent a
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 as their job conditions and they arrive from anywhere to anywhere. Shortly, all
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 do not same equal rights because it depends on their own location, job status, and economic level.
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, the unemployment rate has been increasing even though
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 face accommodation problems. In conclusion, buying your own
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 is so beneficial, because
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 feel a sense of wealth and power in their places. Personally,
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 buying a
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 is a good idea,
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's conditions may be shown differently in some situations and when I consider these reasons, it depends on
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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