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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

#television #children #two #five
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 claim because children aged between 2 and five normally have not developed their abilities to recognize what they want comparing the other items. It can be said that children who are 2 and 5 years old may expose
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 by watching directly a television advertisement.
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 their self-decision will normally be behind. According to the educational organization
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, 60% of child interviewee makes a decision
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 according to what they   are still fostering a capacity of selection based on their feelings, and providing
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direct television advertising toward them is harmful
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 enhancing the ability. Advertisements through
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television are likely to affect consumer
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