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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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The
last
 two decades have seen drastic changes in the way
people
’s lives are influenced by IT, with many significant milestones in
this
 field.
However
, while these technological breakthroughs have brought many benefits to society, it can be strongly argued that these tremendous advances in IT will lead to more negative impacts than
positive
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.
To begin
 with, email has made communication, especially abroad, much faster, and simpler, resulting in a wide range of benefits for business and commerce.
Furthermore
, the World Wide Web helps
people
 to get information easily on every conceivable subject.
For example
,
people
 can access the latest news, online education courses, medical advice, and much more via the internet. It is obvious that these technological changes have made life more convenient and easier for a vast majority of
people
 and will continue to do so for decades to come.
Nevertheless
, the influences of
this
 new technological development have not all been of benefit.
For instance
, many
people
 feel that the widespread use of email is destroying traditional forms of communication
such
 as letter handwriting, telephone, and face-to-face conversation.
This
 could cause a considerable decline in
people
’s basic ability to socialize and interact with each other on a day-to-day basis.
In addition
, a plethora of websites has meant that it is almost impossible to regulate and control.
This
 has led to many concerns regarding children getting access to unsuitable websites and viruses. Unluckily,
this
 kind of problem might even get worse in the future at least until more regulated systems are set up. In conclusion, recent advances in IT have brought many benefits, yet I believe developments involving
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new technology are likely to cause many problems in the future. These must be addressed to avoid damaging impacts
to
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 individuals and society.
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