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discuss both view and give your opinion .student should be allowed to chose any course they like others says otherwise

#student #course
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In recent times, most universities
offer
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 various
courses
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 that are beneficial to undergraduates' prospects. Some exponents believe that undergraduate
students
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 should be allowed to
study
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 their preferred
courses
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while
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 others opine that they should only be allowed to
study
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courses
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 related to
science
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 and
technology
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. In my view, I believe
students
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 should be allowed to decide the course they would like to
study
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.
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, the world is evolving and
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 is because of advancements in
science
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 and
technology
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. It is believed that if
students
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 are allowed to
study
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courses
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 related to
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 field there are high chances of them getting employment opportunities after graduation and
also
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 career advancement compared to other fields. To illustrate
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, a report by the
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 Times magazine shows that amongst most graduates who are
unemployed
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 just a minority of them studied
science
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 and
technology
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-related
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while
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 the majority were from other departments
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 as art, humanities and statistics.
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, it is more advantageous for a student to
study
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courses
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 related to
science
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 and
technology
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.
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, when
students
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 are given the autonomy to decide the course they desire to
study
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, it yields better academic performance which will be beneficial for their future as well.
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, the majority of
students
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 usually choose their preferred
courses
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 based on their ability and passion for the subject which will be a source of motivation for them.
As a result
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 of
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, most
students
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 pay more attention to studying their preferred
courses
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 than what they were forced to do.
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, recent research conducted at Branford
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 on the performance of
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 who
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chose
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 their preferred
courses
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 performed better than those who did not.
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, it is important to
put
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 into consideration individuals' choices
while
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 selecting a course. In conclusion, allowing most undergraduates to
study
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courses
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 related to
science
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 and
technology
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 will give them high chances of getting employment opportunities in the future.
However
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,I believe undergraduates should be given autonomy to choose the
courses
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 to
study
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 in other to enhance better academic performance.

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