Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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there are a lot of smart children over the world so, in my
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we should let
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do and make their choices by themselves.
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when they can make something by themselves they can feel more excited and they can learn from those
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tools technology ... they can discover new things some smart children can change or fix them and create new things which can help the world
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have to control them and teach them something good because they are small and can't know much a lot about rules or laws they can make some mistakes and fault ,
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we are parents and adults so we can control them teach them so
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we can dot that and their choices and dreams come true throughout
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see it is really good for children and
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hope that we can do that because
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have their freedom
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know that very clearly
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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