Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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to
work
overtime
and spend less
time
on their own
time
such
as
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family and hobbies. Even though
work
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overtime
can benefit
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certain
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a certain
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degree, the
drawdrack
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drawback
cannot
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as well. In my opinion, long
time
working can have advantages
in
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to
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some
extend
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,
however
, it cannot
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the problem it caused.
To begin
with, people working long hours will cause health
problem
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problems
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and stress.
For example
, more and more employees have to
work
more than ten hours a day. In order to overcome the tiredness, they usually overdose
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lot of coffee for making them productive and not feel sleepy. Their
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mental
mentel
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mental
health can be damaged by
this
unhealthy lifestyle.
Secondly
, working
long
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time
can significantly reduce
personal
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the personal
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time
which means less
time
for family
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members
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memeber
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members
and socializing. It can cause family conflict and bad
relationship
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relationships
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.
Last
but not the least, excessive
overtime
can drain
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energy
enery
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energy
and creativity which in turn
reduce
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productivity. While it is true that working
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over
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time
can bring more financial income, there are certainly some people
are
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willing to
work
overtime
in exchange for making more money for their lives. Apart from
this
, someone
have
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to
work
long hours in order to meet the deadline for their
work
, but
this
can be avoided by making good
time
management. In summary,
although
there
are
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some
benefit
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benefits
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for
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working
overtime
, the disadvantage cannot be ignored. It is important to make a
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work-life
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work life
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work-life
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balance lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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