You have recently landed in a foreign country on a work visa and need information about the place in and around the city. Write a letter to the relocation assistance provider seeking help and in your letter, Write why you are writing the letter What kind of information you want How and by when you can get the requested information.

Dear sir or madam, My name is Upasana Rani, recently I
have
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moved
Canada
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to Canada

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on
work
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visa for one year. I am writing
this
letter for seeking your assistance
about
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with

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the local places and
area
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around the
city
. As you know, I
have
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shifted here a week ago and I have no information about
city
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the city

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and surroundings. So, I am feeling
aliened
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aligned

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in
this
new atmosphere as
this
city
is totally different from my origin nation. I am looking for some specific information.
Firstly
, I would like to find an appropriate place to reside as now I am living with my friend and as soon as I want to shift to my own premises. Well, I am looking for a place near to
city
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the city

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centre as I am fond of recreational activities.
Moreover
, I can shift
in
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to

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sharing basis apartment as it would be more convenient for me to manage finance.
Further
, I would like to know about some
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visitable

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places in
surrounding
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the surrounding

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where I can go on weekends. Given the situation, I would be obliged, if I get
this
information by tomorrow as I earlier told you I want to shift from my friend’s house as I do not want to be a burden on him because he is a family person.
Additionally
, I am sharing my email address in the end, you can drop me a mail as soon as possible. I solicit
for
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your cooperation in
this
matter. Yours sincerely, Upasana Rani
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