You have recently landed in a foreign country on a work visa and need information about the place in and around the city. Write a letter to the relocation assistance provider seeking help and in your letter, Write why you are writing the letter What kind of information you want How and by when you can get the requested information.

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Dear sir or madam, My name is Upasana Rani, recently I

have

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moved

Canada

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to Canada

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work

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a work

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visa for one year. I am writing

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letter for seeking your assistance

about

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with

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the local places and

area

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around the

city

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. As you know, I

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shifted here a week ago and I have no information about

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city

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the city

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and surroundings. So, I am feeling

aliened

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new atmosphere as

this

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city

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is totally different from my origin nation. I am looking for some specific information.

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, I would like to find an appropriate place to reside as now I am living with my friend and as soon as I want to shift to my own premises. Well, I am looking for a place near to

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city

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centre as I am fond of recreational activities.

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, I can shift

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sharing basis apartment as it would be more convenient for me to manage finance.

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, I would like to know about some

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places in

surrounding

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the surrounding

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where I can go on weekends. Given the situation, I would be obliged, if I get

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information by tomorrow as I earlier told you I want to shift from my friend’s house as I do not want to be a burden on him because he is a family person.

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, I am sharing my email address in the end, you can drop me a mail as soon as possible. I solicit

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your cooperation in

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matter. Yours sincerely, Upasana Rani

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

246 words

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