You have recently landed in a foreign country on a work visa and need information about the place in and around the city. Write a letter to the relocation assistance provider seeking help and in your letter, Write why you are writing the letter What kind of information you want How and by when you can get the requested information.

#country #work #visa #information #place #city #relocation #assistance #provider

Dear sir or madam, My name is Upasana Rani, recently I

have

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moved

Canada

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to Canada

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work

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a work

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visa for one year. I am writing

this

letter for seeking your assistance

about

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with

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the local places and

area

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around the

city

. As you know, I

have

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shifted here a week ago and I have no information about

city

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the city

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and surroundings. So, I am feeling

aliened

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aligned

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this

new atmosphere as

this

city

is totally different from my origin nation. I am looking for some specific information.

Firstly

, I would like to find an appropriate place to reside as now I am living with my friend and as soon as I want to shift to my own premises. Well, I am looking for a place near to

city

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centre as I am fond of recreational activities.

Moreover

, I can shift

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sharing basis apartment as it would be more convenient for me to manage finance.

Further

, I would like to know about some

visit able

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visitable

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places in

surrounding

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the surrounding

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where I can go on weekends. Given the situation, I would be obliged, if I get

this

information by tomorrow as I earlier told you I want to shift from my friend’s house as I do not want to be a burden on him because he is a family person.

Additionally

, I am sharing my email address in the end, you can drop me a mail as soon as possible. I solicit

for

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your cooperation in

this

matter. Yours sincerely, Upasana Rani

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7 paragraphs

246 words

6.50

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Clear and correct grammar

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