Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree or disagree? Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that universities need to have the same number of seats for both genders in all subjects. I strongly disagree with the idea of equality in every university subject as it limits the opportunity for well-deserved and talented people just because of their gender and creates unfair
competition
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. People should not be restricted just because of being male or female. Individuals have different qualities and capabilities,
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talent and abilities differentiate us from others. For ,example in some ,countries male
students
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are not permitted to study gynaecology which is the study of illnesses affecting women
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there are numerous talented men who could be skilful doctors and pioneers in that field. Eventually, by doing so, the opportunity
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some particular subjects will be taken away from the ones who truly deserve a subject. Another concern is that gender equality limits
students
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who genuinely have the potential for a subject and it leads to a
competition
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between the two genders that could have major repercussions.
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competition
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has benefits for people to develop their abilities, unfair
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may have irreversible side effects. In a society where girls and boys are competing against each other to secure a place at university, stress and diseases which are triggered by stress are unavoidable.
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in my
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the number of male
students
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who are selected to study
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engineering is twice
more
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than
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the
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girls which
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female
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work twice
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in order to win
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unfair
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.
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,
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decision has brought depression to many girls. In ,conclusion the selection of University
students
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should be based on merit and skills.
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it would be both impractical and unfair to change to a selection procedure based on gender.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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