It is often considered that changes are more beneficial to people than traying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages of changes overweight the disadvantages?

Changes
are the only constant in the world.
People
argue that it is better to embrace them rather than
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away from them. I totally agree with
this
assertion.
To begin
with,
changes
make some experiences and traditional solutions not applicable anymore.
People
have the tendency to solve problems with the knowledge that they acquired.
For example
,with the emergence of new errors in the software ,
people
might lack
of
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confidence and feel insecure to deal with them.
This
could lead to low productivity
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work. At the same time, if everything
kept
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as
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usual,
people
tend to do repetitive work and lead a tedious life.
Consequently
, it creates obstacles that have a negative impact on
people
's lives. Despite the drawbacks mentioned above,
changes
have a
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positive
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positive
impact on innovation and creativity.
Changes
might create issues, which
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challenge
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challenge
people
to use their intelligence to address the problems.
For example
, with the outbreak of COVID-19,
people
could hardly go to the office or organize big events as before. But with the
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technology,
people
could work from home and have online virtual
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instead
.
As a result
, I think it could propel social progress. To sum up, I think that we should embrace the
changes
rather than run away from them
although
they could have an adverse impact on our life.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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