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You had applied to City College recently, now the college has written back saying the course you applied for is full and they have even suggested an alternative course. Write back to them stating:- Why you chose the first course. Your views on the suggested second course Your plan of action

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to put forward my concern about the alternative
course
 of
B
.E. IT that you have suggested
instead
 of
B
.Tech IT
in
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 which I had applied for. At the onset, I applied for
B
.Tech IT due to its high demand on an international level and
certainly
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 it could have increased my professional opportunities in the future.
However
, as you mentioned that the seats are full in
this
course
, I do not think the alternative
course
 of
B
.E. can be suitable for me. Because I have checked international education evaluation websites,
this
 new
course
 is yet to be listed on these.
Therefore
, I request you to put my name
in
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 the waiting list
of
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B
.Tech IT. If any student shifts from the
course
, please consider my name on
the
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 priority basis and I am not interested in getting admission
in
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 the suggested
course
. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Harry Brown
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