Some say that sprots play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both view, and give your opinion.

When it comes to the discussion about the importance of the
sport
, there are 2 major opposing groups. One states that both individual and collective physical activity helps to form and develop a person, while the other group argue strongly against that. Increased physical activity combined with
a
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play can be observed in most animal
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species
spieces
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species
children.
For example
, kitties are notorious for playing with yarn.
This
activity helps them develop their life skills including their personality. The very same behaviour we can observe
on
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the kids. The
sport
helps them build find their place in society, form bonds with other
people
and, of course, it positively
enhance
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their's body development.
On the other hand
, one could argue that humankind puts too much emphasis and money into professional
sport
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. The truth is that
nature
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of work fundamentally shifted from manual work to the intellectual over the
last
few centuries, and
sport
no longer plays
such
an important role in
people
's lives. On top of that
sport
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clubs and the most successful athletes are overcompensated compared to the more important professions like
a
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doctors, or scientists who save lives
,
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respectively
shifts
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boundaries of what humankind can achieve.
Thousands
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years of evolution resulted in making playing and
sport
as
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one of the pillars in developing personality and life skills for countless
of
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animal
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species
spieces
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species
including a
man kind
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mankind
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. There is no doubt that
sport
is vital in
peoples
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life.
On the other hand
,
nowdays
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,
people
work less manually, and a lot of
people
just do not see
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to overcompensate
athlethes
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athletes
anymore.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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