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Some say sports facilities are important they promote healthy lifestyle. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a controversy about the importance of
sports
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facilities
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. I think I would agree with
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 statement, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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,
people
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 will be directly or indirectly influenced by the sporty atmosphere.
For example
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, There are a lot of
sports
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facilities
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 available in the city, the
people
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 who want to
work
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 out will go there
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;
then
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, when others see there are so many
people
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 are doing
sports
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, they will be affected to
work
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 out as well. The same situation with the friends around you; if you have a sporty friend he/she will lead you to
work
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 out. As a consequence,
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 of doing
sports
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 on a regular base,
people
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 will have a more healthy lifestyle.
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, the number of
sports
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facilities
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 represents the attitude of the government at some point. When there are numerous
sports
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facilities
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, it can mean that the government encourages
people
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 to do some
sports
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;
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, there will be some positive energy throughout the country.
On the contrary
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, if there are only a few
sports
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facilities
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, the residents can't find enough places to
work
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 out and give up doing
sports
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. As a consequence of not having enough
sports
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facilities
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,
people
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's lifestyle can be worsened.
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, they can pique
people
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's curiosity. According to my own experience, there are always some new forms of
sports
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facilities
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,e.g., natatoriums in my hometown, and they constantly attract visitors to come and try them.
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,
people
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's curiosity can be piqued by building new
sports
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facilities
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 and start doing some
sports
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.
As a result
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,
people
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 can live a more healthy way of life. In conclusion, I would say
sports
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facilities
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 help to promote residents' healthy lifestyles.
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