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Many people believe that companies and individuals should pay to clean up the environment in proportion to the amount of pollution they have produced. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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It’s frequently argued that people ought to be charged with regard to the amount of
pollution
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 they create. While I accept that particular organisations should be penalised for
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, I believe that every individual shouldn’t be forced to pay a fine. Having penalised with a specific quantity of
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 factories can assist the authorities to raise cash which may be used in a variety of long-term and rationalised steps to mitigate the contamination of the earth.
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 may
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 deter them from making more
pollution
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 and garbage. Take London as an example, where authorities have spent a hefty sum of
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 on public transportation,
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, local buses which have been designed to be a lot more efficient than the older ones. These vehicles discharge fewer combustible pollutants into the air.
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, these self-centred companies sometimes exploit natural resources like forests, water property and agricultural lands, outside all their constraints just to raise the profit. If those companies aren’t obliged to share the amount of
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, which is needed to suppress
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, they will become more short-sighted (or greedy) in relation to making more
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 without even caring about the effect on climate change and the environment.
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, I would argue that every individual should not be responsible to pay recommended fine. It’s unrealistic that we can prevent people from polluting the universe merely by imposing charges. Because individuals need the power to enjoy technology, farmland to develop plants and lodging to live, food to eat as well as a means of transport to travel.
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, if people from devastating backgrounds are billed more for the impact they have on climate; it will create an upheaval situation where lower-income groups would not be able to cover their daily requirements. In summary, organizations who are earning millions of pounds by simply exploiting natural resources should just be compelled to discuss the sum of
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 in curbing the
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 of most of the common citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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