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Many business meetings and training are increasingly taking place online. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In contemporary society, increasing the work through the
internet
 is becoming popular. More business meetings, training, tuition classes and
any
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other
programs
 are increasingly taking place online. In my view, there are a lot of advantages than disadvantages. I would discuss
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 and weaknesses of
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 of online
programs
. There are lots of positive impacts.
Firstly
, it is a fasted method to conduct any
programs
 than
physically
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 arranged.
Then
 it is saving our valuable time.
Secondly
, can be reduced fuel wastage due to members could not want to go to
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place
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 to attend or conduct the meetings or any other training
programs
.
Thirdly
, anyone can join through
internet
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the internet
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 anywhere they live.
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 if someone
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live
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in
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abroad he or she can join relevant
programs
 through
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the internet
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internet
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such
 as Zoom, WhatsApp or any other online
applications
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.
Consequently
, traditional methods remove away from fresh societies. A few
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negative impacts are there. One of them
it
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will be not effective in rural areas because of the insufficient
internet
 connection in those areas.
Other
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 negative fact is some people do not have appropriate electronic devices. To Illustrate, some parents do not have money to buy a Computer, Laptop or Mobile Phone.
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,
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most probably, these negative consequences are affected
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school children. To sum up, more benefits and
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usage
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 of online methods. With the modernization of
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society, meetings, training, tuition classes and any other
programs
 are doing through online. In my purview, there are more positive effects rather than negative effects regarding
this
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