Nowadays in many countries traditional customs are less popular than in the past. Do you agree or disagree? What can parents and teachers do about this?

Culture and tradition are the
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of every nation. In recent years
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, customs are losing their popularity among the citizens compared to the losing days. I believe
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a result of heavy
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work load
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as well as globalization and
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parent and teacher, by creating time to pass on old rituals to their
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including
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in their curriculums. Traditional values are becoming the things of the past in our society
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work schedule, as every individual is working to meet up to daily demands creating little or no time to perform the traditional rituals of the past resulting
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being unable to forward them to the younger generations.
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, the world has become a global village where people from different
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of the working are interacting and integrating due to the help of technology
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the imitation of western culture thereby neglecting their original customs.
For instance
, a larger population of
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Africans
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now want to dress like the Americans for
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reason, forgetting their own traditional dresses.
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with the assistant the guidance. Parents are the primary contact
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a child has and they tend to learn from them. They should create a time when the traditions can be passed on to
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child
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for example
, through
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story telling
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, going to the accent museums and attending festivals. The children can gain knowledge about the past customs from
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.
Additionally
, schools can include the native cultures in the curriculum wherefore learning about the cultural practices and putting them into action. In conclusion, traditional values are becoming extinct today, but
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and teachers should help to imbibe
this
onto the younger ones.
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