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Some people believe that the restoration of old buildings costs too much; we should demolish them and build new ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One of the basic needs of mankind is shelter and housing. Over the years humans have provided
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 to the challenge of having accommodations and secured habitats. Predictably, the growing population of humans and the surge in migration has compounded
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 challenge and the need for more lasting solutions has emerged. At one time or the other, the question of whether to refurbish old buildings or
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build new ones to tackle the housing challenges has
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 up. Some town planners and property developers have argued
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 that it is best to build up purpose-fit
structures
 rather than to convert existing buildings to suit desired needs.
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 believes that the cost of renovation is much
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higher than the cost of building new
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. It is
further
 argued that old buildings do not meet up with the current environmental requirements and do not satisfy the modern safety
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precautions
precuations
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. Others have
however
 argued that the best way to save up on
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 of materials and conservation of
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 is to fine-tune existing
structures
 to cater for the rising housing demands. It is as well believed that the use of landmass will be reduced and
conversely
 preserved for future use. While it is true that old
structures
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in compliance with
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 architectural requirements, most of them have withstood the test of time and are still sturdy despite their ages.
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 solution to the challenge of housing and accommodation might appear
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 is believed by many futuristic architects that the solution is dawning upon us; bearing in mind
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 the birth of modern live-in
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capsules
, tiny apartments and collapsible
structures
.
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