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Feedback and evaluation are necessary aspects of school and work, but many people dislike being evaluated. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

#feedback #evaluation #aspects #school #work #people #dislike
There is no doubt,
feedback
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that feedback
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 and
evaluation
 grow our productivity at
workplace
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the workplace
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 and
school
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at school
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. But so many
people
 do not want
this
 kind of
evaluation
. There
is
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apply
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might be so many reasons. Homework
of
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in
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school
 or any kinds of skill
need
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needs
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 so many efforts
for
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to
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 gain expertise. Without an
evaluation
 by
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an expert
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expert
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,expert
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 anyone could not
being
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be
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 an efficient skilled person. Not only at
workplace
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the workplace
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 and
school
,
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apply
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 but
also
a
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apply
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feedback
 and
evaluation
crucial
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are crucial
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 for all
of
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apply
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things
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the things
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 in our daily life happening.
That is
 why it is necessary to work and
school
. I think most
people
 do not want to reveal their talent and some
peoples
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people
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 do not have
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enough
enogh
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enough
 confidence
for
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to
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 judge their
evaluation
. For these reasons many
people
 dislike it. Some
people
 think
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evaluation
evolution
evalution
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evaluation
 and
feedback
just
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are just
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an
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a
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 waste of time. But
personally
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,personally
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 I think,
feedback
 and
evaluation
 is the most important part of our learning process. As I mentioned before,
these
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this
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 type of judgemental process would increase our talent. If we show the clear differences between evaluated and
non evaluated
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non-evaluated
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 person's
result
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results
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 to these
people
 who believe
evaluation
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evaluations
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 are unnecessary, I think
this
 problem could be solved. So, in a nutshell, if we want to improve
our
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apply
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any skills
of
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in
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 our daily life,
feedback
 and
evaluation
necessary
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are necessary
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.
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