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Some people think that the appearance of a building is more important than its function. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays people will give importance to the appearance as well as the function of a building.In
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 regard, regarding the aesthetics or functional , I disagree with
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 given statement owing to the following facts. The primary reason for
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 is that we cannot judge a book by its cover. To be clearer, if the building has more doors and if it is an uneven structure for aesthetics only, it will be harder for cleaning and the doors is not useful at all. For ,instance a building with so many doors is difficult to maintain , close and open , it will take more time.
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 if an office is having uneven walls,
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 it will be hard to find an even wall to fit all the furniture in place.So it is best to concentrate on function than appearance. Yet another reason for
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 is that it will be a waste of money and time.
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, If we are building a house for two persons, for aesthetics they are using the whole land and make it spacious and was built with four or five rooms.
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 is really not economical in terms of money as well as labour. To conclude ,
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 is not economical and not functional are the reasons why
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. I believe that people will think more about
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 statement while constructing a building.
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 it is hoped that future buildings will be more functional in preference to appearance or both and make more landscapes.
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