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some experts believe that it is better for children to being learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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On the one hand, various drawbacks may be noted.in the
first
 place, learning a
second
language
 in elementary school is hard for some students who are not intelligent. due to the fact that the level of clever in the whole of pupils is not the same.
For example
 , regarding the 2021 research in, Iran 30 per cent of kids do not understand the new accent . Added to that ,not only taking ne
language
 at an earlier age is easier for offspring , but
also
 it can have an effect on kids.
In other words
, while getting the new lingua franca leads to knowing the new local culture , it has an effect on their attitudes. Sometimes those effects maybe have negative impress.
For instance
, In Italy ,there is a number of slang words or customs which is negative to
children
.
On the other hand
, there are two benefits to learning a
second
language
 earlier.
Firstly
, getting a new
language
 is related to the age of
children
 . due to the fact that
,
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 the brains of kids are more ready to realize new inputs,
also
 they can more focus on the parts of languages
such
 as new vocabulary, grammar, and pronoun the words as an example, my little brother can memorize what teenagers ages, they have more confidence. Because in high school these
children
 can read and speak better than their classmates. Regarding the current research in China students whose
language
 learning was successful. I would like to close my argument ,
although
 getting local languages in primary school is easier for
children
 maybe has negative effects on them, I personally believe that the advantages Are weight on disadvantages. I recommended schools have to damp its negative effects.
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