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All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. What problems does this cause? How can we overcome the problems of poverty? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#world #poverty
Globally, it is seen that wealthy people are getting wealthier and economically weaker
section
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 of the people are becoming poorer.
This
 gap is more prominent in developing countries as compared to developed nations. Which is
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 cause of many problems.
To begin
 with, the impoverished get inclined towards committing
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crime to
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 their daily needs. Sometimes, even the young generation get involved in heinous crime like robbery, open fire, or stabbing.
Penniless
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 public involves in substance abuse or sometimes they see suicide as a solution
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 their problems. government officials or administrators accept bribery to quench their greed. Which
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 in corruption in society.
For instance
, in
India
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 some high-profile court cases were on trial in Supreme Court, where the teens were committed rape and murder.
This
 is because of unrest and
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 moral values and ethics in
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the population
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. Despite harsh punishment, every now and
then
such
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 of cases are continuously being reported in my country. The possible solution
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 these problems is
first
 free education
to
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 every child up to senior secondary level and
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 there should be a provision to take any sort of vocational course.
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 increase in
employment
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 rate.
Public
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 should get
the
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employment so
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 they can live a happier life and don't get into
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 ways to earn their bread.
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 the social reformer or government organization should work on the upliftment of the weaker section of people by providing them help in terms of granting loans for their business or by proper training, knowledge or resources related to their business.
Furthermore
, free health care services should be provided to the poor. To conclude
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, well off and underprivileged both should work in order to fill the gap between, as in
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 and harmonized world only
human
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the human
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 race can live happily and peacefully.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Income inequality
  • Wealth gap
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Marginalized communities
  • Impoverished individuals
  • Privileged elite
  • Disparity in living standards
  • Social stratification
  • Exacerbate
  • Living below the poverty line
  • Income distribution
  • Lack of access to basic necessities
  • Food insecurity
  • Limited healthcare services
  • Education barriers
  • Socioeconomic mobility
  • Resentment
  • Economic disparities
  • Resource allocation
  • Underprivileged
  • Vulnerable populations
  • Cyclical nature of poverty
  • Government intervention
  • Multilateral cooperation
  • Empowerment
  • Progressive taxation
  • Equal opportunities
  • Social safety nets
  • Unemployment rate
  • Corruption
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