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Technological innovations have affected our lives. Do you agree or disagree?

#innovations #lives
Technological growth
are
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 cutting the edge nowadays .There are
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may
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many
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 aspects of human life
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is
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depended
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to
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tech-performance
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tech performance
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. It is inevitable to consider the effect of technology on our lives. I am going to account
some
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toward
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 their effects.
First
 of all,
traveling
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travelling
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 to
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foreign
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a foregin
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foregin
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foreign
country
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countries
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 needs to book a flight , having
are
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servation
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reservation
 on a hotel and request
for
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a visa ,all of them doing a click on the internet in your home.
second
, you can connect with your
collagious
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collages
on
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in
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 other countries
by
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through
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 social
medias
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media
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 and
setting
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an
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 useful agenda
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through
throgh
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through
 these programs.
Third
 ,there are many
application
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applications
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 which anybody
use
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them
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for progressing on
different
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 educational
topic
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topics
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,health
level
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 and winding down in
spare
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their spare
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 time. Using
by
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high tech
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high-tech
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equipment
equipement
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equipment
, many specialists can
calculted
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calculate
calculated
 complicated
formula
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formulas
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 and
having
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 better performance on
own
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their own
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 jobs. In conclusion, some impacts of technology on human life are better networking around the world ,speeding and simplified in some actions
such
 as
traveling
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travelling
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 to other countries and improving the careers.
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