Most of the world’s problems are caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree.

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this
day in the contemporary era,the
world
is experiencing
such
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a challenging moment that
which
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is affecting the sustainability and running of the day-to-day activities.Most
people
consider overpopulation as the main cause of
world
problems.From my point of view,I completely agree that there are too many
people
on the planet to sustain and
i
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believe
also
that
overconsumption
pray a huge role in
the worlds problems
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First
and foremost,too many
people
on the planet are
such
huge
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burden because it is difficult to sustain,some of the needs they require
go
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by the number in the community.
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,when there is a huge number of
people
,it means most of the activities offered in the community are not quality since there is much to offer.
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,
a
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research by the University of Nairobi depicts that 90% of cities are crowded.There is a total decline of spaces for accommodating
people
.
Therefore
,the huge burden the
world
is experiencing is stuffed so with good support and planning the matter can quickly be solved.
Secondly
,another fundamental issue which is in the top gear is
overconsumption
.Resource use has outpaced the sustainable capacity of the ecosystem,and the policy that stands to protect against overuse is
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working.
However
, with
this
indication,the need of the community will not be achievable due to the imbalance.
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,
a
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research done by Kenyatta University depicts that
overconsumption
matter is
of
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70%
in
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causing global troubles.
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lawmakers are becoming greedy
such
that they have no priority of matter to be attended to
first
.
Therefore
,overutilization of resources has caused an imbalance in
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whole global
world
. To sum up,there is a huge number to sustain in the whole
world
such
that service delivery is affected in terms of quality.
However
,it is imperative to note that apart from the aforementioned drawback,
overconsumption
also
affects the
world
.
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