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Most of the world’s problems are caused by overpopulation. Do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
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 day in the contemporary era,the
world
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 is experiencing
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such
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a challenging moment that
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is affecting the sustainability and running of the day-to-day activities.Most
people
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 consider overpopulation as the main cause of
world
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 problems.From my point of view,I completely agree that there are too many
people
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 on the planet to sustain and
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 believe
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 that
overconsumption
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 pray a huge role in
the worlds problems
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the world's problems
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 and foremost,too many
people
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 on the planet are
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huge
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 burden because it is difficult to sustain,some of the needs they require
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 by the number in the community.
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In addition
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,when there is a huge number of
people
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 ,it means most of the activities offered in the community are not quality since there is much to offer.
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 research by the University of Nairobi depicts that 90% of cities are crowded.There is a total decline of spaces for accommodating
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.
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,the huge burden the
world
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 is experiencing is stuffed so with good support and planning the matter can quickly be solved.
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,another fundamental issue which is in the top gear is
overconsumption
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.Resource use has outpaced the sustainable capacity of the ecosystem,and the policy that stands to protect against overuse is
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no longer
nolonger
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no longer
 working.
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, with
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 indication,the need of the community will not be achievable due to the imbalance.
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 research done by Kenyatta University depicts that
overconsumption
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 matter is
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70%
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 causing global troubles.
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 lawmakers are becoming greedy
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 that they have no priority of matter to be attended to
first
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.
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,overutilization of resources has caused an imbalance in
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 whole global
world
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. To sum up,there is a huge number to sustain in the whole
world
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such
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 that service delivery is affected in terms of quality.
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,it is imperative to note that apart from the aforementioned drawback,
overconsumption
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also
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 affects the
world
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.

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