In recent years, television has contributed most to changing the quality of life of ordinary people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many
people
believe that the invention of television promotes the
quality
of
life
for ordinary
people
more than any other
inventions
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invention

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. In my opinion, I completely agree that
TV
has the most positive impact on
life
for
average
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the average

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person from different areas.
Firstly
, the
TV
is the primary source of entertainment, families always watching
TV
together. It is the most common and usual way to spend time when families are gathering together
in
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at

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weekends or festivals. Watching
TV
together not only develop
a
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apply

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bonding among the family members
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,
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but,

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also
is a way to find
people
who have the same interest, which means it helps
people
to expand their social group. Another point to consider
TV
has contributed more than any other
on
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the
quality
of
life
of ordinary
people
is that narrowing the difference of
people
around the
people
, which might accelerate the process of globalization.
In other words
, there is no platform to let ordinary
people
from different countries and different cultures
to
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apply

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know the
people
on the other side of the
world
before
TV
was invented. With the development
to
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of

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TV
, the
quality
of
TV
programs has become better and better.
For instance
, the Olympics, one of the biggest sports competitions around the
world
,
which
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has benefited from the development of
TV
. Different athletes from different countries around the
world
could show their cultures and personalities to the
world
, which let everyone from different could feel
it
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apply

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through

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though
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through

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TV
. No matter who you are, you can enjoy the same visual entertainment as the top level of
people
, which promotes the
quality
of
life
of ordinary
people
. In conclusion, I would say that the invention of television has contributed more than any other
on
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the
quality
of
life
of ordinary
people
.
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