Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opnion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

These days, as parents have more responsibilities towards their
children
compared to the past they need more education and information about the new ways of growing up their
kids
too and I completely
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with
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essay, I will discuss the required skills before my point is drawn at the end. As science and technology keep processing nowadays and all of us
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the power and effects
of
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them on our
children
it has been entirely vital to become trained about various aspects of being
a good parents
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because today's world is more complicated and
kids
require more support and care.
However
, it does not necessarily mean we have to become educated at schools.
For example
, If we participate in a practical workshop, we can gain adequate related skills in different aspects. In many cases, we at least need to know a little bit
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, physical, medical and mental sciences for raising our
kids
.
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,
this
knowledge helps us to have
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appropriate
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with especially our teenagers and young
children
secondly
, building
this
knowledge
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us to
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healthier
kids
in both aspects of physical and mental.
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, parents should know about the essential
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which anyone
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at each age stage for the body health and
also
know about the way of decent
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towards them. In conclusion, having
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and necessary knowledge of knowing how to raise
children
is
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vital and educational system of all countries should consider it a part of their plans and I agree with teaching youngsters the principle of how to be a great parent and suggest everyone
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participate these kinds of courses. If I had been more aware of the importance of
this
lesson, I would have passed a course of it at a private institution before becoming a mother.
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