Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opnion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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These days, as parents have more responsibilities towards their

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compared to the past they need more education and information about the new ways of growing up their

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the power and effects

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them on our

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because today's world is more complicated and

kids

require more support and care.

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with especially our teenagers and young

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healthier

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at each age stage for the body health and

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towards them. In conclusion, having

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and necessary knowledge of knowing how to raise

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vital and educational system of all countries should consider it a part of their plans and I agree with teaching youngsters the principle of how to be a great parent and suggest everyone

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participate these kinds of courses. If I had been more aware of the importance of

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lesson, I would have passed a course of it at a private institution before becoming a mother.

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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opnion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parents, from the time they began studies or work and until they married. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

The best way to learn a foreign language is self study online. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflex the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Social media, indeed, has enhanced the communication network and allow people to keep abreast of the happenings around them. In my opinion, despite certain advantages, I believe that the drawbacks of using social media outweigh the advantages.