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Some people say when you move to a new country, you have to learn the language and culture of that country. Others say it is better to stick to your old traditions. Discuss both opinions and state yours.

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According to some
people
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moving to a new area connects with
the
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learning the
language
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und
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and
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 culture of a new country. Others incline to the opinion that the important thing
to
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 own
language
 and traditions.
This
 essay discusses both ideas from psychological and economical perspectives.
First
 of all, a
migraion
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migration
 to
the
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another country and the learning of a new
language
 can cause a number of negative emotions,
such
 as
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feeling
feelling
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feeling
 unsafe,
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loosing
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 their own identity and old friends. In order to avoid these outcomes, some
people
 choose to keep their native
language
 and traditions. It helps them to stay in a comfort zone, at the same time they feel confident and stay psychologically
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healthy
heatlhy
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healthy
.
For example
, I know some
people
, who moved from Russia to Germany without knowing
German
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language
 and felt depressed. Staying connected to their
ralatives
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relatives
 and friends helped them to feel relaxed.
On the other hand
, some
people
 consider that learning a new
language
 and culture
provide
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 some economical benefits.
People
, who have learned a new
language
, have better job opportunities and higher incomes
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compared
comprared
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compared
 to
people
, who
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 not know
the
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foreign languages.
For instance
, after moving to Germany my friend has learnt the
language
 and found a well-paid job in a short time. The applications of the candidates without knowing
German
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language
 were declined. In conclusion, I support the opinion,
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 the
language
 is an important part of moving to a new place. It can help not only to integrate
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 a new society but
also
 to start a perfect career.
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