The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The importance of
education
for all members of the
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society
is undeniable. The more people
have literacy
in a society
, the better condition the society
has in various areas such
as economics and politics. I strongly believe that efficient rules must be determined which lead
every individual in Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
society
to take the steps in education
and earn a basic knowledge in every part
of science and literature. In the following paragraphs, it will be discussed that
why Correct word choice
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adults
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adult
education
is very important and what would happen if authorities do not determine a proper solution to provide them with education
.
Firstly
, the population of people
with
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between
age
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aged
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20 to 40 has a vital place in every Change preposition
of
society
. In fact, they constitute the
active Correct article usage
an
part
of the
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society
which
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and
is
expected to play an important role in Correct subject-verb agreement
are
industry
. Add an article
the industry
In other words
, there might be a huge number of adults
in a country
that are not able to find a proper job due to the
lack of Correct article usage
a
literacy
. Based on evidences
, in Japan, which is a high-tech Change the wording
evidence
pieces of evidence
shreds of evidence
country
with developed Correct your spelling
factories
factors
factoris
and improved industries, nearly 98 Correct your spelling
factors
percents
of the Correct your spelling
per cent
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population
poulation
have the ability to read and write. Correct your spelling
population
On the contrary
, the mentioned rate is about 60 Fix the agreement mistake
percent
percents
in a developing Correct your spelling
per cent
country
with a low level of economical situation such
as Iran. Thus
, the importance of adults
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adult
education
is unneglectable in every country
and further
actions must be taken for their education
, otherwise
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,otherwise
country
would confront with
major problems.
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Secondly
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the adults
adults
population is likely to become parents in near future. As a matter of fact, they will not be good parents unless they learn vital information about parenthood. Change the noun form
adult
In addition
, the more knowledge and literacy
they have, the better children they can bring up. Based on the recent reports published by criminal
section of Correct article usage
the criminal
Tehran
police organization, in 60 Correct article usage
the Tehran
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percent
percents
of cases, individuals who Correct your spelling
per cent
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commit
commite
a crime are brought up in a family in which the parents do not have the ability to read and write. Correct your spelling
commit
Therefore
, being educated not only affects individuals’ lives but also
lead
them to provide their children with efficient guidance.
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leads
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opposite
opposit
side, if the governments put all the effort and priority Correct your spelling
opposite
to
youth Change preposition
into
education
the future society
might become unbalanced as a part
of the society
is well-educated while the middle-aged part
does not have sufficient literacy
to affect the environment. As a result
, there will be a
high pressure on the educated population due to the high taxes which is Remove the article
apply
a
financial aid for uneducated Remove the article
apply
people
who are not able to work. Consequently
, the rate of unsatisfaction
among educated Replace the word
dissatisfaction
people
will grow and this
might lead them to immigrate to other countries with better
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a better
condition
.
In conclusion, the role of Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
education
can not be denied in any society
. All members of the
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society
must be provided with proper education
. Regardless of the
age, Correct article usage
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a
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high quality
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high-quality
education
for all individuals in a society
would lead a country
to a better condition and redemption.Submitted by mehrad.aghaei on
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