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In many countries more and more young people are leaving school but unable to find jobs what problems do you think youth unemployement causes for individuals and the society?What measures should be taken to reduce the level of unemployment among youngsters?

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Education nowadays is considered
as
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the
second
 backbone of nations after Agriculture. But, there are some countries where most of the people leave their schools in between due to several reasons.
For instance
,poor financial status, lack of
skills
 and early marriage
issues
 for women etc. can be easily mitigated by taking numerous measures.
However
, they will directly render aid in the reduction of unemployment . I will fully elaborate
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further
 in subsequent paragraphs with relevant solutions.
Firstly
, in the context of causes,the main reason for not getting a job includes
,
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 Financial
issues
.
Moreover
, there are some individuals, who can not afford to fulfil the fee of schools,coaching institutions, colleges etc.For epitome, to get the proper coaching from prominent coaching centres like Drishti, Vajirao etc. you need to pay at least 2 lakhs , which is not affordable for poor people.
Secondly
,
Skills
 play a significant role in getting a better designation , which is somewhere lacking in those , who don't complete their
further
 studies. As we all know competition is increasing day by day in every sector , whether it is corporate or government with insufficient vacancies.
On the other hand
, these
issues
 can be resolved with the help of various government schemes and enhancement in seats of numerous occupations.
For instance
, the Indian regime has started a scheme namely "Saksham Yojna" for those , who want to finish their
further
 education and can easily recover the monetary problems through
this
. To encapsulate, nowadays almost everything is money-based, and to mitigate monetary
issues
 one has to work hard , for which he needs proper
skills
 .
However
, we can only get
skills
 through proper education facilities.
Thus
,
this
 is the only way by which the unemployment rate can plunge among the young ones.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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