Medical procedures for cosmetic surgeries not be allowed. Do you agree or disagree?

Multiple antithetical opinions exist on the issue of body enhancement. Some opponents insist that cosmetic surgeries should be banned.
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, I consider those who go for image modifications,
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it for their self-esteem as well as correct other underlying medical complications. The choice most individuals make towards their health has been influenced by the profound trust
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technical developments.
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, people carry out
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as a means to establish self-confidence. People who are not physically endowed may suffer
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complex from the society they find themselves
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,
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some part of the world,
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as Korea, China, Japan and so on are faced with deformities especially in the face, making their citizens correct these abnormalities via plastic surgeries or
face lift
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.
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, people should be allowed to get their aesthetic needs. More so, the health of humans should be put into consideration.
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the rate of deadly diseases
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of obesity has significantly increased over the years.
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, in 2019, a Nigerian actress by name Jennifer Badmus revealed that she suffered severe heart disease caused by excess fat in the body and the only remedy was liposuction.
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, the good general
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of an individual
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longetivity
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. In conclusion,
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erudite
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that an embargo should be ordained to eradicate reconstructive
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by the populace.
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, I do not agree with
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opinion
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cosmetic surgeries proofer
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and solution
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those with health complications.

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