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Some people argue that parents of children who break the law should be punished in some way, because they are responsible for their children’s actions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to the development of lifestyle. There is no denying the fact that
parents
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children
 who break the
law
also
 have to bear some kind of punishment.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and have
opposite
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 idea with that. Looking at the argument for the view that their
children
 break the
law
 and they have to suffer the consequences with them, it is admitted that some of them prove to be quite strong. In fact, one common justification is that not all
children
 are good at
listening
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 their
parents
 teaching them. One strong argument
in
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this
 case is that there are some stubborn kids, they often argue back at what their
parents
 say, they don't listen. So here, it is clear that the wrong thing comes from the
children
, not their
parents
, who have tried very hard to teach them. There is no reason to force their
parents
 to be punished even if their kids did something
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that break
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break
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 the
law
. Indeed, as for the supporters of the idea that punishment is unnecessary for
parents
 of spoiled
children
, they certainly have
solid
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 reason for their own point of view. And obviously, their justification seems convincing as well. It could be argued that
children
 spend more time in school than at home, so it is possible that things there
such
 as teachers or friends are the cause of the problems.
For example
, in
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highschool
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high school
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 there
is
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are
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 some students
have
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who have
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 negative peer pressure.
This
 leads them to turn to drugs,
alcohol
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, and do bad things to get them because students can't make money yet and easily
to
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become a criminal without their
parents
 knowing anything. From what has been discussed. I completely disagree with the opinion claiming that
parents
 of
children
 who break the
law
 should be punished in some way
,
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 because they are responsible for their
children
’s actions.
This
 stems from the fact that there are
children
 who do not listen to their
parents
' teachings and they are more often influenced by the outside environment than in their own home.
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