Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often discussed that
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community
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service should be mandatory in high school curriculums. I agree that
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work starting at a young age helps
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develop a strong character and a helpful personality. Allotting time during the
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day to
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in the
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teaches
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importance of positive development of their society.
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, the student could participate in planting trees in the
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.
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initiative would teach the student the importance of "going green" as well as beautifying the area. The more trees, the less CO2.
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small effort gives rise to potential health benefits
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the
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and may contribute to an increase in the lifespan of its" people.
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, volunteering can assist
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in creating strong ties to their
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. As they interact with many different kinds of people they develop improved interpersonal skills, resulting in improved communication.
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who participate in mandatory
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work may discover hidden talents that will help them achieve
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goals and careers. Many people struggle with their purpose in life even late into their adult years. They spend many years trying to "find themselves." Working for a charity may result in a job or career they would not have discovered had they not participated in
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service.
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, developing a sense of compassion for others particularly the elderly or disabled will promote a healthy sense of
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. In
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I believe that
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that participate in a mandatory program of
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community
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service
in
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their high school years will only help to improve their character, sense of
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and
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and help them develop into strong healthy members of society.
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