Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisement ? What measures can be taken to protect them ?

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People have faced a vast of attractive propaganda to familiar with the commodities throughout companies to increase the desire to buy them.
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the amount of tendency to have a particular product will
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by the attractive advertising of a store requires to explore different
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I am going to provide some strong aspects to change the consumer's desire.
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of all, the vast majority of papulation have known that attractive
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the
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quality
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merchandise,
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, the cosmetic industries have recruitment actors to showing their beauty products ,
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each wisdom individual
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not impressed by these trends and will
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continue
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well-done branding based on own
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experience
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often happen throughout emotional shopping , if
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to need which product ,
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they will not decide to
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, consumers aware
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about
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the different aspects of
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commodities will
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cognitive process. To sum up, I would claim that the awareness of consumers , the purpose of shopping and the previous
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a specific product.
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