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In many developed countries, stress is one of the biggest problems. what are some of the factors that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it.

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Numerous factors have facilitated the ascending
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 level in developed cities. In
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 we will shed some light on some possible causes of the
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 problem, as well as some solutions. In my opinion, the underlying factors of
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 can be generalized into two folds, economical and psychological. Economical
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 are those related to the hunt for more resources or the situation in which difficult decisions are to be made due to deprived resources, and
stress
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 level is typically greater for the latter.
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, some people would be under
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 when they are in a competition for a promotion opportunity, others may feel worried when seeing the ever-rising property prices.
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, some grass-root members of
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society are living from hand to mouth and they can be on the brink of a mental collapse in the process of making their ends met. As for psychological
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, the
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 are numerous and comparatively more diverse in nature. They can be related to relationships, studies, health situations of the family members and so on.
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, a friend of mine, who did not get along with colleagues, was once very stressed about going to the annual dinner of her company, as she feared that nobody was going to talk with her. Due to the fact that the root of the
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 of
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 is so heterogeneous, never is it realistic for us to pinpoint a particular solution to solve all the problems involved. As far as I am concerned, the key point is to adjust
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's thoughts. More often than not,
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 implies that the current status which
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 is in is less desired than the level
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 wants to be in.
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, in order to relieve
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, it is advisable for
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 to accept the current undesirable status mentally, yet
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 should not give up but still try his or her best to achieve the desired result. In conclusion,
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 is usually originating from economical or psychological
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. In order to handle
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 in a better way,
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 should realize and accept honestly
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the real situation he or she is in
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 and continue to work hard towards the goal.
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