Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discus both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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sports
activities to obtain a healthy lifestyle as well as Use synonyms
in
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for
a
commercial purposes. Around the Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
world
people Add a comma
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attend
sports
and some have become more and more famous. Use synonyms
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professions and Change the noun form
sports
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whether
wheather
it is fair to Correct your spelling
whether
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receive
recieve
a higher pay than others.
As all we know, some people have special abilities to do something. Correct your spelling
receive
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Likewise
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,Likewise
sports
is an ability that everyone cannot do. If one is more talented to do some sport, he or she might not Use synonyms
having
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have
be having
ability
to go far from education. As an example Change the article
the ability
world famous
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world-famous
sports
persons Use synonyms
Ussain
Bolt, Roger Federal and Lionel Messi Correct your spelling
Usain
has
no Change the verb form
have
any
good educational background, but they are are having specific talent in their Correct quantifier usage
apply
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relevant
relevent
field. Correct your spelling
relevant
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they have a really superior fan base throughout the world. Add a comma
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result
they are getting Add a comma
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opportunity
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the oppertunity
oppertunity
to go for commercials and various campaigns. Correct your spelling
opportunity
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it is fair to earn a great amount of money.
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,Likewise
Although
when doing sporting they spend so much effort on the playground and it is Linking Words
queit
difficult comparing to other jobs. Correct your spelling
quiet
quite
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addition
they can have serious injuries while playing.
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,addition
Furthermore
, other professions like doctors, nurses, engineers and even cleaning workers can Linking Words
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also
aslo
earn money up to a Correct your spelling
also
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certain
cetain
extent, but not Correct your spelling
certain
as
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like
the
sportsmen becauseCorrect article usage
apply
,
they are not famous characters in Remove the comma
apply
the
social media and Correct article usage
apply
on
newspapers. Change preposition
in
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However
there are some Add a comma
,However
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professions
proffesions
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professions
in
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at
epert
levels who earn more than Correct your spelling
expert
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sporting
sprorting
profession but they are not famous. So people Change preposition
in sprorting
unaware
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are unaware
about
them.
Overall, in my Change preposition
of
opinion
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,opinion
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success
sucess
is one's faith and with our Correct your spelling
success
strength
we can climb up the ladder. No one should be Add a comma
,strength
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jealous
jelouse
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jealous
about
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of
the others success
. So Change to a genitive case
the success of the other
the other's success
i
think it is fully reasonable to earn Change the capitalization
I
high
amount of Add an article
a high
vage
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vague
by
the Change preposition
in
sports
profession rather than the other employment categories.Use synonyms
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