Education for young people is important in many countries. However, others think government should spend more money for education in adult population who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Literacy plays a vital role in our life.
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still a majority of
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not educated. Youth is known to be the future of a nation but the
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public
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role to play in
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society. On one hand , the elderly people
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a lot in an ample manner by means of management in homes or in any field by their experience and knowledge.
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being aware of it, an average number of
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is still
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illiterate
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crisis or not having enough facilities for education. In a manner to eradicate
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, the legal body of a country should invest to provide learning materials for it. It can be done by running schools on small scale for that special group along with it a campaign should
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be organised to spread awareness of its benefits. I strongly agree that the running political party should enhance
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rate of
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group as it is the backbone of the society.
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it is important to be educated as everything is based
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technology .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education
  • young people
  • government
  • money
  • adult population
  • read
  • write
  • development
  • nation
  • improve
  • quality of life
  • investing
  • reduced
  • poverty
  • income inequality
  • funds
  • balancing
  • budget allocation
  • crucial
  • equal access
  • opportunities
  • promoting
  • literacy
  • numeracy
  • positive effects
  • society
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